Raccatoons's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Sublo & Tangy Mustard #13 - Convention]

Amazing work, you're continuing to challenge yourself and it shows! Your ability to capture atmospheres through characters and environments really sets you apart. Can't wait to see your next toon.

Aaron-Long responds:

Thanks a lot! I did want to get more atmosphere into this one, in a few ways. Glad you liked it!

[Hideo Kojima Solid 3: Kojima Eater]

I'm gonna be as honest as I can be, hopefully I don't come off as rude.

To start, this toon has a very slow build up. Way too slow. The initial narration was good but replacing it with subtitles for almost a full minute managed to completely disengage and disinterest me for what was to come next. (Plus, at 00:09, the audio fades out too quickly and leaves us with an awkward silence) I also noticed at the very beginning of the narration audio there is someone else's voice for a split second, avoiding audio errors like that is paramount.

The Hideo Kojima being credited for nearly everything joke could work well as an opener or closer, wherever you wanted to work some credits, but that joke is simply not funny enough for the entire video to be centered around it. When you repeat it so many times, it runs dry pretty quickly. You have to understand you can only tap into a joke so many times before it becomes stale, almost annoying even. Having the video centered around that joke and making the punchline snake hitting his balls on a tree branch... just doesn't work out. They don't connect at all.

That aside, I really enjoyed your choices in character design, it's simple but interesting to look at. It reminds me of old Newgrounds cartoons, almost to a fault. I understand you may want to pay homage to the artists that came before you, but you should really try to find your own voice. If you try to be the next egoraptor/oney, you are bound to fail. Just be yourself, and animate what YOU think is funny! I've seen a little bit of your other stuff and it seems like you're on the right track. The voices in this cartoon are great too, but you should really try to work on your lip sync, it's important to get that at least semi-right. Kekeflipnote has a great tutorial on that on twitter if you're interested. I'll just link it here: https://twitter.com/Kekeflipnote/status/958327787668099072

The cartoon is 2:30 but the actual animation (not including the bonus at the end, since it's not pertinent to the cartoon itself) lasted only 30 seconds. Personally, I think this means you need to focus more on the timing aspect of your videos in the future. Timing is everything, and you really don't want to keep your audience waiting, or leave them deprived of material.

Wow, I just read in the description that this is just a part of a 10 year old NG collab, which leaves me feeling like an idiot for typing all these notes out. I'm sure you're doing much better stuff now. Carry on!

SuperColoroid responds:

Very thanks for your review, MoonCoon! Very sustancial and useful. Great feedback!

As you read it, I did the original animation in 2008 (Ow man! How old I am). It was only the part who Snake appears (inside the aircraft, jumping & kicking his balls)
Adding the initial credits & the “Hideo Kojima” joke who all the cartoon center around it was an actual work. I thought making the animation more interesting with this.

The voices Corey Holland did (the original animation part, Snake & pilot) are a great work. I tried to dub the initial text & the subtitles of the starting credits. But I wasn’t very glad with the result.
I need to improve my English pronunciation, voice acting, and buy a semi-professional microphone.
The lip-sync, I just did the mouth move when he spoke.

I thought about not putting the text too fast so people can read it without pausing the video.
The problem with this, people can read it slowly or faster. It’s something relative to each person.
But yeah, the final result of the timing... After several adjustments, I have published it in this way. As I thought it was better.

And thanks again. I will try to publish more animations that I have. Improving what I have learned to do better.
A greeting!

[Sonic the Hedgehog: A Dark Secret]

The animation and backgrounds were all really great. I really liked the visuals and sound effects you threw in, they really tied the whole cartoon together. Tails running up to sonic was seriously the funniest shit. The voice acting was decent too.
I will say though I don't think the memey stuff wasn't good for this (WHAT ARE THOOOOSE, sanic, rustling jimmies). I thought it really took away from the quality of the whole animation. Seriously, "what are those" joke came out of nowhere and I feel like you could've done more with the Shadow bit. Plus, canned sound effects (such as that door opening sound effect at 1:24) should be avoided. I know it's tempting to use existing stuff like that, but you might want to look deeper for sound effects which are less well known already. It can ruin the immersion viewers have to hear stuff like that.
As for the ending, i think it would've been a lot better if you just cut it after tails said "too slow" to end with more of a shock value, rather than do the whole seinfeld thing, which I'm pretty sure everybody watching has seen parodies of already.
All in all, I liked this cartoon and hope to see more from you. You draw very well, and I like your style. Keep it up.

Narmak responds:

Thank you for such detailed feedback! To be honest, this animation was originally supposed to be a quick 1 minute thing for fun, but I always get way too into animating and then its becomes 4 minutes long :\
But yes, this was the only animation of mine that I did not storyboard before I created it, I kinda just went along with whatever. Also, is the door sound effect well known? I found it online and didn't recognize it as a common sound effect.

[GAME OVER]

You sure you didn't make this in 2007? It really seems like it's from that era of internet cartoons. Made me feel a little nostalgic. I really like your character design and your animation is fairly decent! One thing I would work on though is your lip sync. When all is said and done, I did enjoy watching this, and that's what matters most. Great job!

Mrevilcookiez responds:

oh good! I'm glad it made yu feel that way! :D
Thank you!!
yeah XD the reason my lip sync was off on this vid was because I had A LOT of trouble with saving the video and so it messed up my process.
Thank you for the review!

[Pokemon Golder]

The drawings, voice acting, and jokes were on point! I really enjoyed this cartoon.

mattyburrito responds:

thanks so much man :) I'm glad you liked it!

[New Girl]

It was pretty cool to begin with, and then you broke the fourth wall which was really inventive! Your animation shows a lot of promise! The jokes were pretty good too. All I can suggest is for you to keep at it and practice drawing, and maybe record better sounding audio next time. Otherwise, this was great. Keep it up dude ;)

HMFD responds:

Thank you for the feedback, as we often say, our audio is our main issue but we are trying to fix this and make it sound a lot better. Hopefully future episodes will show this :)

[Attack on Pikmin]

This was tits man! Great job!!

TerminalMontage responds:

Thanks!

[Animated Nipple Slap]

This was pretty funny man! I'd suggest coloring a bit and making a better background. Other than that the animation was nice. You show promise! If you ever need a voice actor let me know.

VortexVisionz responds:

Like I said, I created this short bit a couple of years ago and I didnt have an animation tablet at the time lol. As for the voice acting check your messages on your youtube channel

[Art of The Mattress]

Can't say I'm a fan of the art style but the animation was awesome!

Intrapulation responds:

I found this style easier to work with, rather than the traditional.